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Review:toomanycurls says:
For someone who doesn't like angst, you did an awesome job making me feel angst during this!

I loved the tension and mystery you put into this story. Your use of imagery in this is remarkable. Part of me could feel the cold that Victoire felt and see the expressions and reactions you used. I was kind of curious why Teddy didn't want Dom to find out he was proposing to Victoire - did he know about her relationship flop with Alex?

The logical grown up in me wants to say that Dom is overreacting and not accepting her sister's good news with good grace. Then the part of me that remembers what a first love feels like and the first heartbreak as well is a bit more understanding.

I do really like that despite her sister's reaction, Victoire went out after her and tried to find her. You've described Victoire's feelings as the eldest really well. I can tell that she loves her sisters and feels quite responsible for their wellbeing.

The ending is quite squee-worthy. The open ending is perfect because it at least lets me know that she's home but doesn't try to resolve all the conflict you introduced in the story.

Awesome job!
-Rose

Author's Response: Haha, Rose! You're too sweet! And I might have started warming up to angst, especially after I read A Moment of Fear! I just don't like sad endings...which is ironic because my next one shot isn't all too happy :*(

Thank you so much! Imagery was one of my main focuses here :) Hm, I probably will make that clear in the next edit :) It was meant to be that Teddy proposes after Dom comes home, so he knew about her problems :)

Yeah, I don't know of anyone who has experience a serious relationship or love or marriage, but, initially, I would feel super betrayed is someone did that to me. But, of course, only initially :) And I think, more than the fact that Vic was getting married, for Dom, she is sad about her own relationship and a bit resentful that Vic has what she can't.

Thank u so much, I was scared for that too! I have no siblings, but I love writing about them and have quite a few friends who do have siblings :) My cousin is good enough as a younger sister though :)

Thank u so much! I felt that if I did try to resolve it, it would ruin the feel of the story and make it fluffy and cheesy. I didn't want it to be fluffy and cheesy, i just wanted to do something different :)

Thank u so much!! That was really sweet!!! :D

-Curie :)


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