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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, there! Snagging every last point that I can before the Reviewing Battle draws to a close.

I thought you did an amazing job of capturing Severus's first moments in his new life as a portrait. Starting out with just a bit of confusion, you walked us through a very believable progression of thoughts and feelings from Hogwarts' most notorious Headmaster.

Dumbledore made for an amazing guide as Severus starts to get his bearings and figure out what's happened. Then again, Dumbledore is always great in that role. The poor guy is just barely conscious when his thoughts go back to Voldemort and the Shrieking shack and the moment when he died. I felt badly for him when he was so worried about the outcome of the battle. If he'd woken up to discover that Voldemort won, it all would have been for naught. But that didn't happen. It's over and the good side won.

Probably one of my favorite parts of this was the very genuine-sounding apology that Dumbledore offers in return for demanding so much of Severus over the years. Snape did lead a painfully stressful double life, constantly in fear of being found out and suffering an agonizing death for betraying the Dark Lord. The relief he feels at being freed from that life was palpable in his reaction. You did a great job of writing it.

I loved the idea of more portraits of Snape being commissioned for the Slytherin common room and the Potions Classroom. The Headmaster of Hogwarts has spies everywhere, don't they? At least Severus will be able to freely visit the places that he was most in his own element. Perhaps he can even scare the pants off of some First Years in Potions class! ;)

Wow. So they sent Harry to present Snape with his OoM. I guess that was a great photo op for the Ministry, as well as something Harry probably would have felt strongly about. It was nice to see the two of them begin to mend fences after so many years of hostility and mistrust. Snape even calls him Harry. That felt like a really big step.

I noticed two minor typos that you might want to take a second look at:

"There was alot of repairs to the school and the wizarding community that needed to be done." were a lot of repairs

"We never would have stood a chance if it weren't for your contributions, Sir," he stated quietly, so that no others would over hear. - overhear

Overall, your writing flowed really nicely. The story felt smooth and it was an easy, enjoyable read. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and letting me know about the typos. Spelling is not my forte so I always have difficulty with that.

I always worry about the flow and the characterization but I'm glad that's not the case. I did plan on writing more chapters of when Snape steps into his new portraits but wasn't sure how well that would be received.

Thanks again for the review!

~Celtic~


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