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Review:CambAngst says:
Ooh! A creepy morgue scene. Nice ambiance!

I had some misgivings about one part of the scene in the morgue. I'm not sure why the medical examiner thought it was important to tell Harry about David's educational history when he was identifying the body. I understand that this was information you probably wanted to get to the reader somehow, to reinforce that there was a connection between David and Teddy, but this seemed like kind of an awkward way to do it. I thought you might have been better served to have Healer Graham ask Harry how he knew the victim and let Harry explain how David befriended Teddy. It would have sounded more natural coming from him.

But Harry's reaction was spot on. Shock, denial, panic... his response was perfect. He's trying to process so many things in his head. He's just learned that one of his friends is dead and the person he's been working with is an impostor. And then it all clicks for Harry. The pieces start to come together and in an instant he's on his way. I think a few things clicked for me, as well. I'm more convinced that never now that Teddy is Theo Moon. "Teddy Remus Lupin" sure has some similarities to "Theo Moon", doesn't it?

Something about Harry's visit to David's office brought that film noir feeling right back to me. I'm imagining him sitting here, searching through the drawers of a worn, wooden desk, rifling through files in old manilla folders. It's just a perfect visual.

So David/Theo has been hunting the killer. And he's obviously made a lot of progress! It all seems to be coming back to Halloween. I think the party is going to be a gala affair, filled with drama, excitement and possibly murder. ;)

So I found something in this chapter that I hadn't seen in quite a while: a typo!

It didn't take long for Harry to figure out what all the highlights names meant, to see what he had seen; that it was the same person. - I think you either meant to say, "what all the highlights meant" or "what all the highlighted names meant".

This story is making my morning! Enjoying it so much!

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