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Review:CambAngst says:
You raised more interesting questions in this chapter, and offered maybe one or two answers. I like the balance. A good mystery story always starts off by priming with reader with a lot of things to wonder about, and you have my head spinning around a few things right now.

First off, I'm really curious what it is about Halloween that Harry doesn't like. Aside from the really obvious one, that is. Halloween was the day his parents died, but that was far more than ten years ago. Something else bad obviously happened, and since neither Ron nor Ginny seem to share Harry's dislike, it must have been something fairly particular to him.

So the killer used ink to compose his message? That's actually pretty clever. Blood would have been much more likely to leave clues, either on the wall or on the body. I liked David's analysis of the crime scene. Rather than fall back on a lot of mumbo-jumbo spellwork that would have given the situation a deus ex machina feel, he's using simple investigative techniques to piece it all together. Looks like Harry will have one more reason to dislike Halloween this year.

David, himself, is really starting to interest me. He's plainly a complex character. Smart, good at what he does, and he clearly has a thing for the ladies. Has Sam actually composed a multi-chapter story without any slash? Stop the presses! :p Just kidding. But I do think I'm going to have a lot of fun speculating about David as the story goes on. You added that little bit of intrigue with his wand, which just adds fuel to the fire. And that bit about him fixing his collar: I got a total Sam Spade vibe. Are you going for the noir feel to this story or am I just imagining it?

Then we get another look at your antagonist and very possibly his next victim. It seems that he also has some major investment in Halloween. Big things coming, methinks...

So I will take your author's note for what it's worth and not really nit-pick you on the typos and grammar. I didn't see anything too bad, but it could use a good beta-reading.

You think I can squeeze in one more chapter before bed? Let's see...

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