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Review:CambAngst says:
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You certainly know how to set a scene! The crashing thunderstorm, the pelting rain, the darkness... not something I'd want to be caught in the middle of with a pack of werewolves lurking about. Dominique is certainly dedicated to her profession.

I thought you did a really good job of picking relevant back story to include in her thoughts without just backing up the truck and dumping it all into the first chapter. You wove the information nicely in the reasons why she shouldn't panic at the sight of a werewolf and all of the reasons why she doesn't want to get bitten. I mean, aside from the very obvious reason. ;)

So I more or less knew what was going to happen here based on your story summary and chapter summary and I have to admit I was a bit skeptical coming in. But I thought you did a good job of selling the paralyzing fear that prevents Dominique from simply apparating her way out of danger. She really does come off like somebody frozen in indecision whose brain has simply shut down from pure terror.

I thought there were a few places in this where your word choice was either awkward or incorrect. "Lightening", for starters, is not the same as "lightning", which is what I think you meant to say in the first sentence. The phrase "how much ever she tried she couldnít get rid of it" also didn't read right to me.

To answer your major question, I definitely think you should continue. Dominique would be the first female character to become a werewolf that I've ever see in fan fiction, and I think there's a lot of interesting ground to explore there. Follow your muse!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. Sorry for the delay in responding!

I am glad that you liked the way I set the scene as I worked hard on it. I wanted to portray Dominique as someone very passionate about her job so its good to know it came across.

Its a great relief to find out that you think I did a good job with including relevant backstory without it making it seem like I am dumping all the information.

I am pleased you think that I managed to do a good job of showing the fear, especially since you were wary of reading this. Thanks!

Oh thanks for pointing out that lightning thing! I'll correct it when I edit =) Thanks for pointing out that phrase as well, I'll see what I can do!

I am so happy to get your encouragement. I am definitely continuing it and hopefully I'll be able to write all the way to the end. Thanks so much!


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