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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
This is such a sweet lovely chapter! You created a loving family atmosphere, that describes Molly and the burrow perfectly. I love your portrayal of Audrey - much more friendly and nicer than the nasty cliches.

Percy's very generous, and loveable - quite a big jump from when we last saw him, but you managed to smooth that over and tell us that he progressed and Audrey brough out the side of him - that normally wouldn't be very believable but you made it so by making Audrey such a gentle thoughtful person.

The chapter title is very inventive and imaginative - I love how much it applies to the context of Audrey's child blossoming, and Percy blossoming as a good person, e.t.c. I can't really think of a much more appropriate title ;) I like the way you showed the pros and cons of having so many children - not just the negative parts, but you've shown both sides to having a large family.

Another quirky thing about this story is the nickname Mop - which I think is very helpful to create affection for a character and help build on that relationship between the toddler and the rest of the family. I like the way you made the cake "freddie" instead of fred - to show that there are both similarities and differences between the two characters - and also how affected everyone is - even people that didn't know him like Audrey.

Overall, a really detailed, descriptive thoughtful chapter that was a pleasure to read! :D

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and review, I really appreciate it. I'm so very sorry I've taken ages to respond!

I do love the atmosphere at the Burrow - it's partly why I started writing the story! As for Audrey, I'd never really read anything with her in it, so I had no idea what the cliches were! But I just thought that she'd have to be someone patient, and kind, and probably a little bit no-nonsense, to be Percy's wife!

Thank you for your comment on Percy - I didn't want it to seem that he had changed as if by magic (!), but I did want him to have developed significantly. I think fatherhood would also have made him see the world a little differently, and have a different appreciation of his parents. I actually think he was never 'bad', as such - just somewhat lost and easily led in his desire to prove himself. Ron had that same desire, but luckily he was influenced by good friends, not power.

I love big, rambling families! I want one of my own, pros and cons included. I'm very glad that you pointed out the story title - it's actually not the original title, but once I changed it to 'The Blossoming', it just fit perfectly. I'm glad you thought so too! It works for many other characters as well :)

Haha well, Mop and Freddie were originally born of necessity, as I didn't want confusion - and having 'Jr.' or 'II' is not very Weasleyish! But I really like the nickname 'Mop' for the toddler, and it's good to know you found it established a relationship with her family.

Thank you so much, again, for reading and reviewing!

xo


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