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Review:academica says:
I meant to stop by and review this the other day when I noticed the story had been updated, so I'm glad you posted to do a swap with me. Thanks :)

I like Hermione's point of view a lot! She seems very ruffled, but at the same time, I get the sense that she wouldn't be in this job unless she thrived on its busy nature. I like how she struggles to juggle all these different talents and duties--being a good wife to Ron, working on a law, babysitting. I also like how thoughtful she was and how she didn't just have knee-jerk reactions to everything. It reminded me a lot of the Hermione in canon.

I guess the one thing that threw me a little was the placement of Hermione's reflection on Snape. I think it's totally in character, but I would consider moving it down so that it's after Draco leaves. Otherwise, it seems like she's staring at him while she goes on this long train of thought, and that would be kind of awkward to picture realistically.

Nice work! This is coming along really well!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda!

I'm glad that you liked Hermione's POV! Yes I don't think she would be happy at all, if she couldn't be rushing around, and changing the world. I'm glad that my Hermione reminds you of canon Hermione, as she tends to be changed a lot in fan fiction, so I wanted to keep her to the original.

Yeah I liked her reflection on Snape, but thanks for pointing that out! Now I realise it, it does seem a little odd there, and I don't Draco thinking Hermione's stalking him or something ;D

Thank you for the great review,

Kiana :D

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