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Review:academica says:
Hi! Thanks for the swap :)

This was a really cute start to the story. I really liked how Oliver didn't say too much during the first part of the chapter, because it really emphasized the description of the players talking circles around him. It was funny to imagine him just standing there and trying to be patient. I also really like how I've started to get to know each of your players without being hit over the head with, okay, this is this person, and here's everything about them, and this is the next person, and here's everything about them... you know? That's good.

In fact, the only thing I felt like was missing was more of a sense of Oliver's characterization. I would have liked to know more about the circumstances he was coming from and what his life outside of his work was like. But I'm sure that's coming in the next chapter or two.

Nice start :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Awh! Thank you so much :D

Ohh thank goodness! Because that is the biggest danger with multi-character stories, especially when you're introducing so many at the one time! I didn't want it to be a thing of 'This is Mary she is twenty she is blonde', so I'm glad it turned out okay!

And yes, I was purposely vague withh the whole 'what is Oliver doing teaching these ruffians' thing, as it is to be revealed at a later stage!

Thank you so much for the review :D

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