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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Wow, this was an extremely intense and intriguing chapter-and it was certainly very well written. I loved it!

I actually love Benjamin and Roxanne's relationship, mainly because it has so many levels-so many ups and downs and so many mysteries. I think you wrote this kisses at the start really well. You somehow managed to, through Roxanne's very confused thoughts, make them dark and dangerous, just like Roxanne described. I also liked the bits of Roxanne's personality you were able to bring through in that scene-that she is clearly strong-willed and strong-minded and doesn't like to be pushed around.

I really loved the family background you gave us to both Roxanne and Benjamin in this chapter. I enjoyed reading the back story about Angelina not joining the Holyhead Harpies because she married George and also what she did when he was annoying her-that was a very nice little touch. And the fact that Benjamin uses a silencing charm on his bedroom so he doesn't have to hear his parents somehow makes him a little more human, which I think is essential in developing a great character.

Oooh, now I'm intrigued about what this surprise when Roxanne gets back to Hogwarts is! Is it going to play a main part in the story, I wonder? Are there students from the school in Italy coming to Hogwarts for some reason? I guess I'll just have to wait and find out!

Very nice cliffie at the end-a lot of things that could happen next are flying through my head right now. I am looking forward to seeing where Ben and Roxanne's relationship goes next.

Courtney:)

Author's Response: HellO!

Welcome back and thanks for reading this so soon! :) I thought that you would really like this chapter and I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much. :3
I think that's why I like writing Roxanne and Ben's relationship, you're never sure what you're going to get with the two of them. There's so many different things that I could say and have them do! Ah, that little thing with the kisses just made me blush so much, I'm not sure how I got through it! D':
I'm so not mature, obviously. HAHAHA.
But yes, Roxanne is a pretty strong willed girl and I think it came across really well. She needed it to deal with Ben in this chapter you know! ;)
Kissing Benjamin Malfoy is risky business. But oh, so much fun, right? Hehehe.
Yep, I did give more details on both of their lives at home! I had to, actually, as the scene wouldn't have worked without it. The thing with Angelina not joining the Holyheads in favor of marrying my dear Georgie is from "This is Angelina", another fanfic of mine.
This story is sort of like a spin off I guess but anyway I love writing George and Angie so I had to include that little bit with them. :D
Their relationship is alot different from Ben and Roxie's. :D
Oh, yes, the Malfoy home is not pleasant, which is why Ben has the silencing charm up. He's having a tough time! And I think Benjamin is human most of the time, I try to make him more human but he's this big engima and gives me a tough time. :p
Heheeh, I can't tell you what happens at Hogwarts! It'll spoil everything! ;) You'll just have to keep reading!
Oh, so many things happen in the next chapter, be wary of it though. You might not love me anymore after you read it! HAHAHA.
Thanks for reading!
Much love,
Gabbie


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