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Review:Courtney Dark says:
I really liked this chapter-especially the flashback which was super, super sweet. Both Benjamin and Roxanne seemed so innocent...and Ben was much kinder and sweeter than I've ever seen him in the present day.

This relationship you've created between Roxanne and Ben is amazing. They are-or perhaps, were-very close friends and they have these moments when this friendship shines through. But the rest of the time, it almost seems to be a battle of the wits, and there are all these mysteries and questions that surround their relationship that I want answered!

The scene in the Malfoy Manor was great, and a lot of fun to read. Your use of imagery was great int his chapter-you made the manor feel dark and slightly sinister, which completely matched the tone of this chapter and Roxanne's feelings. I also loved the fact that you mentioned how Harry, Ron and Hermione were brought to the manor and how Hermione was tortured-how Roxanne felt like she was betraying them by going there. It was a nice touch, and reminds you that Roxanne is part of the Weasley clan and a Weasley at heart.

So we finally got to see Benjamin interacting with his father in the present say! Their relationship is certainly a very interesting one and I am curious to know more about the event that has got them both so worked up. You do a great job leaving the audience with questions-I am completely hooked and want to read more!

I think the way you ended this chapter was perfect. The line: “Liar,” he whispered with gentle venom before Roxanne felt the devastating pressure of his mouth against her own' was devilishly brilliant. I really enjoyed reading this!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello!

Oh, goodness, I didn't expect another review from you so soon. This is such a lovely surprise of course and welcome back to the world of confusion, Malfoy men and poor little Roxanne caught in the middle. :D
So, I wanted to finally show that there is some connection between Roxanne and Benjamin, especially with that flashback. I had to make sure that you all got a sense of how much things had changed between them, hence why they were so innocent in the past.
I think that so many things have changed between them that is more of a battle of wits, sexual tension and irritation. I loved playing with those emotions and how they dealt with them all! :D
I love writing the Malfoy's home. I had always found it such an interesting place to set up a story or a scene and I do it in one of my other stories too (Ahem: "A Force of Wills" in case you want to read it). I really don't like stories where the Malfoy's past is hushed up like it never happened, which is why it came off as so dark and unpleasant for Roxanne. There's this sense of the past and present and that underlying sense that not all is at it appears.
Roxanne is truly a Weasley at heart, I'm glad that it showed and Benjamin? Well, he showed his Malfoy traits didn't he?! :D
I think Ben and his dad have this weird, tense relationship. I want to play around with it alot more but haven't had the time but I'll get to it but thanks so much for liking this! I'm really glad that you do. :3
Ooh, just wait until you read the next chapter! ;) So much angst and girl-emotions.
Hehehe. And Ben's kisses are just so...terrific and embarrassing to write! :D
Thanks so much for coming back!
Much love,
Gabbie


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