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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hi darling! It's been ages since I've read and I figured I would pop and give a quick review. I'm afraid that my review isn't going to do your wonderful story justice.

I am LOVING the insights from the Death Eaters and that front in the war. It's wonderful. It definitely amplified the dark undertones that pervade the story. Your characterizations of Voldemort, Lucius, and Bellatrix (especially, Bella) were outstanding. We see quite a bit of them in the series and thus keeping to canon is so difficult, but you mastered it with ease. I'd have to say that this chapter is my absolute favorite thus far. I know it's only chapter five, but there's so much going on! So many secrets! I'm just going to end up fangirling over the entire novel and never giving any decent comments or advice!

Now, those last two sections! I want to know that secret that Lily and Sirius are keeping! It might actually be killing me, the not-knowing! Jami, with each chapter I see your weakness strengthen and your strengths hit their pinnacle. The characterizations are top-notch; the mixture of description and dialogue has settled into this lovely, natural flow. It's just an all-around winning story. Winning.

And the part with Minerva and Albus? To. Die. For. I adore the two of them and you did them perfectly. Their dialogue was probably some of the best I've read in fanfiction. So stately. I love that Albus appreciates the Marauders' name for the future Death Eaters. You almost foreshadow (even though we already know) his propensity to delight in learning, growth, and ingenuity in young adults.

I just love it, darling. I wish I had a better review for you! (I'm sorry it is so short, but I must get back to planning my lessons for this week!)

Author's Response: You have no idea how excited I was to see your name here!

The Death Eaters sections are some of my favorite!! They come in about every four chapters or so, mainly whenever what they're doing relates to my characters/Hogwarts.

I'm so happy you liked Bellatrix. I've actually really fallen in love with writing her through this, and will hopefully do at least a one shot eventually.

This chapter is where I think the story starts picking up. It felt like, after this, I started getting more into my 'niche' so I hope you'll kind of feel like they get smoother and more polished from here on out.

Ablus is terrifying. Minerva and I are starting to bond, but that old man and his twinkly eyes... plus I'm also trying to make him slightly different than the one we know. I really believe that he treated Harry with kid gloves for so long, because he didn't do that with his parents. James and Lily entered into a war too early, and it killed them. Dumbledore had to have cared quite a lot about them, so I think that he sort of regretted treating them like such adults, and went to opposite way with Harry.

Of course that's all just head canon :P

A better review?! Yeah right, this was amazing, Shelby. Thank you so much for taking the time to stop back by here ♥ it made my week ♥


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