Ok, so I REALLY loved this chapter! The whole situation with Roxie seeing Ben again, but having her brother and his dad right there is so uncomfortable for her, and I feel so bad, but I love reading it! Awkward situations like that always make me cringe a little bit, and I think you've written this perfectly! Perce and Roxie were great together, and I loved how they tease and bicker with each other, and how they know each other so well that it's really hard for Roxanne to hide anything from him.
And then George joins the party, and that was hilarious! Especially when he saw Benjamin! Hahaha I was laughing out loud at him, and at Angie too when she arrived! I honestly just love how you write them, especially because Perce and Roxie get so embarrassed around them. I would be, too! But they still make me laugh, probably more than anyone else in this story! You write the pair of them perfectly!
It's interesting that everyone keeps pushing Adam onto Roxie, and I'm curious to see if it leads to anything! I have a feeling that Adam and Bianca aren't really right for each other, and that he's going to have a crush on Roxanne, but she definitely is going for Ben (whether it's intentional or not) so I don't know how that would turn out!
This chapter was so funny and great to read, and I can't wait for another update! Hopefully the first chapter of my new story, Holding On, will be up soon! 10/10
Author's Response: Hello!
Cassie, its always such a pleasure getting a lovely review from you. And thanks for coming back to this, I wasn't too sure about this chapter, I didn't really like it, to be honest, it didn't go the way I wanted it to. :p
Yeah, it really sucked for Roxanne didn't it? I wanted to make it as cringe-worthy as possible because I wanted to make it as realistic as I could. I'm sure a meeting like that would be awful for anyone. T-T
Roxie and Perce are so close that they really can't hide much from the other. I thought that making that distinction between them was really important. There's alot of love and arguing in there. Hahahhaaha.
Oh, George. He's SO much fun to write and he's so embarrassing, I would just turn into a puddle of nothing if he were my dad. But I'd love him to death. :D
Angelina's just as bad. Hahahha.
I think this story is getting a little too angsty on some things. I might try to lighten it up a little bit, I don't want you guys getting all worn out from Roxanne's emotions. Hm.then again, you sat and read through This is Angelina all right. HAHHAHA.
Yeah, everyone wants Adam and Roxanne to happen but I'm not sure if it will. Firstly, Roxanne isn't interested and she's got this thing for Ben and well, its not really going to go right. I'll play around with that in the future!
I'm having a writer's block right now so sorry that you won't get any updates from me in a minute but I'll try to get something up soon!
Can't wait for your new story! :D
Ooh, what's it about?