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Review:teh tarik says:
I can never resist an angsty Weasley twin fic (especially anything to do with dead Fred), and I'm so glad to have the chance to read this piece. It's beautifully and poignantly written, and you've done a brilliant job at incorporating humour into the angst, drama and bleakness of the situation. So I've come across a few Fred's funeral fics before, and the best ones are always the ones which avoid too much melodrama and instead balance out the grief with moments of humour and lightness - just like your story here. After all, these are the Weasley twins :)

Your characterisation of the twins is quite wonderful - they're very much in-character and the conversation between them is so natural and smooth and well-written. You handle the transitions between the idiosyncratic humour and silly jokes and puns typical of the twins to the more sombre moments with grace and skill, and the whole piece has quite a wonderful flow, actually.

I love the moments of subtlety in your story as well - there was the part where George turns to his side to make a joke to Fred only to discover all over again that he's not there. I'm assuming the joke was about that strange tufty-looking wizard :) It would have been so fitting. And I love that you remembered Angelina in this story as well! That simple request Fred makes to George to take care of Angelina is so lovely, and of course, it hints at their eventual relationshion and future together.

I think you were also especially successful in your use of second person POV. It's not an easy narrative style to pull off - it can get pretty forced and unnatural in some stories, and a bit too contrived in others. But your use of this style was just wonderful and smooth, and it also lends a very intimate sense to the narrative. Gah, what I'm trying to say is, it's beautiful.

All in all, this is an amazing piece of writing. You've captured all the emotions poor George must have felt, and you've also given us a snapshot of the twins' relationship with each other. It's wonderful, how there's such a beautiful moment of hope despite all the grief and sadness of the whole scene. Thanks for writing this! Great work!

-teh

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for a lovely review!

I love the Weasley twins too! Even though reading dead Fred upsets me so much I can't help but read it - it gets to me so much though. I'm glad you felt my version of his funeral was well written!

I'm really happy you liked my characterisation of the twins! I was so worried about not doing them justice so I can't tell you how much it means to me to read these comments!

I had to include the bit about Angelina. I honestly couldn't imagine the two of them getting together without that moment. I can't see George doing something like that without knowing Fred would be okay with it.

I'm relieved to hear you think the second person POV works too. I was really worried and kept swapping and changing but I am glad I stuck to it in the end.

Gosh - thank you so much for all your kind words, they really mean so much to me!

Lauren :)


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