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Review:ValWitch21 says:
Hi Jami!

I quite liked this chapter, particularly McGonagall, who isn't as objective as she should be but makes a lovely job of hiding this fact!

The interaction with Polly worries me -- it feels like the first /real/ interaction between the war and the secluded, comfortable world of Hogwarts.

You portrayed Dumbledore brilliantly, though I miss his twinkling. Of course, the circumstances are not twinkle-prone, but it would be nice to see a lighter side of him every once in a while. I feel like we get a lot of stern Dumbledore these days, though it's not necessarily a bad thing...

That scene of hysterical giggling at the end was great. It transitioned nicely from the dark chapter before, and gave us some more Lily/James time -- with Sirius there too, obviously, but still a light ending note.

Another lovely chapter, and I eagerly await the next one!

&hearts

Author's Response: Hi m'dear!! Thank you so much for reviewing ♥
I really wanted the interaction with Polly to give off that kind of feeling, so I'm really pleased that it did.

I agree with you about Dumbledore. I guess I've only really had reasons to bring him in if there's something negative going on.. I'll have to try and find a way to get just a small section of not so serious Dumbledore in!

That laughing scene at the end was a bit spur the moment. Haha. It just felt like the kind of annoying thing James and Sirius would do, and poor lily just couldn't control herself ;)!

Thank you again so much for your awesome review ♥ it plastered a huge goofy smile on my face. :)! I'll make sure to keep in mind that we need to see just a glimpse of our twinkly Dumbledore ♥

Jami


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