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Review:adluvshp says:
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Aw this was such a lovely sweet story. I absolutely loved reading it. I think you have portrayed Bill and Fleur, and their relationship, very beautifully. The transition from them becoming lovers, to becoming parents, and everything they faced and went through in between, was all written brilliantly.

The memory of Fleur protecting her sister was amazing, it showed a very strong side of Fleur, and added so much to her character development. I loved that you added it in. It was very powerful.

The conversation between Fleur and Molly was also a very sweet touch and I liked reading it. I think the dialogue between the two was written well, and was believable. It added an essence of warmth to the narrative, and was a very nice touch.

The fear, pain and loss of the war was very raw in your narration, and it made for a great realistic read. I loved the part where Fleur makes them all sit and talk and share their memories, it was extremely touching.

The ending scenario was the sweetest, where Fleur and Bill learn of her pregnancy, and the way there is a sort of chaos before Bill hears the news. The last paragraph was just beautiful and it made me smile.

I think you understand Fleur very well and write her so beautifully as this fierce fiery strong woman who would do anything for her loved ones, and also her relationship with Bill. So, great work!!

I didn't see any issues of grammar either, and enjoyed reading this!

10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi darling! Ahh this piece is one of my older ones but I just haven't gotten the motivation up to go through and rewrite it. I'm so happy that you liked it, though, because it was one of the first that I really loved writing.

Fleur will probably somehow manage at least a short story out of me someday. Her character is just so amazing, to me, and what she willingly placed herself in all for the man she loved. Then when you add her not so nice traits into that, she really just becomes this awesome complex character to work with.

Thank you so much for this review. Like I said, this is an older piece so I don't usually think about it and now you've made me want to write Fleur a bit more. Maybe I'll get hit with a plot bunny soon ;)



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