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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi m'dear! Here from review tag!

Ohh I love the idea about there being ghosts that not many can see. With how much different sort of things there are in the HP universe, it fits right in. I also liked that Ellie wasn't afraid when she spoke with her great gran.

I love the irony of Rose and the divination. I also like that you've chosen her as your OC's best friend instead of Lily.

I'm sure you know that your sort of stepping into a cliched plot here. But cliches are there for a reason -- because people like them. I don't think it matters that this sort of plot has been done before as long as you add your own twists of characterization in on Albus and your OC. You've already started adding in different traits to your OC, like the fact that she doesn't do quidditch, so I'm sure you'll continue putting your own unique spin on her and Albus and their love hate sort of dynamic

I feel like we were missing a bit of descriptions to help set the scenes. It doesn't have to be a lot, just small details thrown about to remind us where we are/what's going on.

This was a really fun first chapter, m'dear. I liked the light adventurous attitude of it all!

Jami

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm glad that the ghosts appear to be so popular. I wasn't sure how well received it would be - if it would fit in right or not, but I'm happy that you thought they did!

Rose and divination - I think it has so much potential for being so much fun!

I am fully aware of the cliche plot, but I didn't know what else to do, and I actually really adore cliches for some strange reason, but I shall endeavor to make it a unique experience!

And yes - description is something I struggle with, but I tried to add some more in the next chapter, but I'm not sure if I improved or not! But I'm trying to work on it - thank you!

Thanks, again, for reviewing!


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