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Review:Debra20 says:
Hallo! Guess who's here again? I am thrilled with how the story is going at the moment so you better get used to seeing my presence here after every chapter :D

OK so this chapter we see Beth actually talking to Severus. Let's take a moment and SQUEAL! Oh dear I wouldn't be more excited about this if it was me in place of Beth! I don't know yet exactly why, but your story reminded me how much I love Snape and how I always wished there had been someone out there that loved him, or at least cared for him as much as he cared for Lily. We have no indication whether his story with Beth will be a happy one but I am overly pleased with the idea that he did have someone to care for him at least (even if it isn't canon...but you write it so well it could pass off as canon any day!).

I am deeply intrigued and a little unsettled by Peter's proposition that only two of them should transform and be with Remus when it's that time for him. Knowing what we know about Peter I can't help but be suspicious about this thought he had. Plus the reason he gave to back it up was very shallow. I was somewhat surprised that James agreed with it. I was expecting them to dismiss it on the spot. Hmm...I'll keep a lookout on Peter! You treacherous rat!

Also, Snape! What is wrong with you man?! Why won't you even look in people's eyes when you speak with them? That was very rude of him to do but maybe he was just...shy...or rude lol. In any case their conversation was delicious to read, albeit it was too short for my greedy liking haha. Can't wait to see what happens next!

You are very well on your way hun. Beth feels like a person and that's very hard to convey at times with OC's but you are great at it. Not to mention Snape and the others. It's a pleasure to read stories such as yours that carefully follow canon material :)

Author's Response: And guess who's here again to leave another response on one of your lovely reviews? :D I'm so excited to see how much you're enjoying the story so far -- really!

The idea of wanting someone to love Snape, beyond friendship, was exactly the reason I set out to write this story. The story I mentioned a few responses back (Curious Happenings at Number Twelve) is mostly a Sirius/OC, but there are touches of Severus/OC, and it was that story that planted the idea in my head in the first place. I love writing original characters, too, and it's a weird thing, but all my stories have put canon men with original women. Maybe I feel none of the canon women are up to their standards -- who knows? I'm really just thrilled to pieces that other people have seemed to think along the same lines as you and me!

Everyone was suspicious of that line of Peter's; I promise I didn't mean it to be that way. :P Writing Peter in this was quite a challenge, though, to be sure! And I will admit that I sometimes have Snape's problem of avoiding people's eyes when I talk to them... which really isn't a good thing. I am trying to be better about it! (I hope shyness is the reason...)

So, so, so glad that Beth already feels a person, and not a character, to you. ♥ I've worked so hard to keep this story as canon as possible while still including an original character, and reviews like yours make me know that all the small plot headaches I've had through the months have all been worth it! Thank you so much!!

(And while I'm thinking of it, congratulations on making prefect!)


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