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Review:ScarletEye158 says:
Hi there! I'm here with your review exchange and I'm sooo sorry for how long it's taken me! :O

This was such a great first chapter. You had me instantly hooked from the moment I started reading... Your writing style is absolutely brilliant and the descriptions were so awesome! I don't think I've ever read a fan fiction where Hermione seemed so canon! Her arguments with Albus (Who I totally thought was a counselor at first, so bravo for that ;D) were so intense and I could actually feel myself getting angry by some of the things that were happening...

This line really opened my eyes...

"For you to tell me that my parents can't come see me at St. Mungo's if I'm sick or attend their grandson's Hogwarts graduation... That's simply not acceptable."

I never even thought about this not being a possibility for muggle-borns but it totally makes sense and I'm glad Hermione is taking a stand against it!

Another thing I loved about this story is that you made Albus part of the Magical Law Enforcement Squad instead of predictably making him an Auror. It gives him a lot more character and personality when you're able to guess and try to understand why he chose one over the other. I also like how Hermione and Al have obviously formed a huge bond over it, it seems like they are friends as well as relatives and I love when I can say that about my own family members!

I thought it was really interesting how you changed the whole plot of this story with one little twist... that package! I totally thought at first that Hermione was going to do something about the Statute and then all of a sudden *BANG!* new plot! It was really cool and I totally didn't see it coming xD (I'm really curious as to who sent it to her though..)

Oooh, your description of Albus' first sights of Greyback gave me chills... I really hate that man with a great passion and if I were ever faced with him, my blood would probably go cold too. :S With that said, I hope Hermione does everything in her power to keep him locked up... He's such a disgusting person.

Ahhh, what?! Albus was sticking up for Greyback? :O I know he didn't know much about him, but still, that struck a bit of a nerve in me. I'm glad Hermione is taking it personally though (even though lawyers and law enforcement aren't supposed to) because Greyback has no right to get out. He's a pure monster! Thank you so much for writing this and getting my blood boiling! I needed a good story to read where I got super invested in it :) I'll most definitely read the next chapter soon and I can't wait to see what happens next!

So so great! Keep writing, you've got a real talent (:

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello, there! I hope your surgery went well and you're feeling much better!

The idea of using the practice negotiation between Albus and Hermione to introduce both characters and sort of conceal the true nature of the story for a bit seemed like a good way to start off, so I'm glad you liked it. I wanted to try to show that this is still the Hermione Weasley (nee Granger) who fights for justice and equal treatment of all. She's not vengeful and bitter about the war, at least not in general terms. It takes something very specific to set her off.

I get pretty turned off by most stories -- there are some exceptions, of course ;) -- where any of the Next Gen kids become Aurors. After all they fought and suffered through during the war, I don't think that Harry, Ron, Hermione and the others would have wanted that life for their children. That's not to say that it wouldn't have happened in some cases, but Albus always seemed too sensitive.

The identity of the package sender is revealed in chapter 2. It might not be who you think. ;)

Albus is willing to give Greyback the benefit of the doubt because he would pretty much be willing to give any werewolf the benefit of the doubt. He grew up steeped in his aunt's idealism, hearing stories about Teddy's father, the heroic werewolf who overcame discrimination to become one of the heroes of the war. He doesn't realize what Greyback is all about. People that horrible don't exist in his sheltered world. He might change his opinion by the time this is over...

I'm really glad that you enjoyed this. Thanks so much for the lovely review!


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