I am already scared to read this chapter, just look at the title!
We are only a few paragraphs into this chapter and you've already given me heart palpitations!
We are not friends anymore. Seriously, I am not okay with this. I am still trying to believe that it doesn't end how I think it's ending, but I'm fairly certain that I'm wrong. :(
I really wanted to comment on your fight scene and what loved about it, which is pretty much everything, but now I just want to go lay in my puddle of sad feels. But if I were to comment on the fight scene, I would mention how absolutely awesome it was that you use so many different perspectives to show exactly what was happening, without actually showing exactly what was happening.
It made for such a gripping, intense scene, but like I said I am not commenting on that because I'm too sad.
I've been telling Dorcas this entire time to stop being so reckless !!! and now look what's happening. Why are you making me feel so sad?! :(
I also wanted to mention how impressed I was with your scene of Voldemort going into her thoughts. I love that you pretty much had him seeing only what he thought he needed to see, and missing what actually happened.
Okay. I'm going to go live in my optimistic. 'Dorcas lived' world, now.
Author's Response: Hey, it's me responding to this awesome review finally!
Yeah, the chapter title is pretty telling. I actually had a lot of fun (I don't know if fun is the right word, but it was a gratifying experience anyway) coming up with chapter titles that I felt embodied the spirit of each section of this story. Most of them came from the music that I listened to to get in the mood for this. As you can imagine, it took a lot of effort to get into these dark, disturbing characters' heads.
Let's say that you were able to comment on that fight scene, which I admit, was tricky to pull off with all those POV shifts. Let's imagine that you were able to put aside your sad feels for a moment and enjoy it for what it was. I would have gotten immense satisfaction knowing that someone like you appreciated all the effort that I put into that scene, and I would be so thrilled to read that you actually got it: that I was trying to "show exactly what happened, without actually showing exactly what happened".
But since you're too sad to comment at all, I'll just pretend that you did in my head. In my head, I am gushing over your use of the word "awesome" and that you liked the different perspective thingy. Besides chapter 12, I found that scene to be the hardest one to get right.
I'd been talking to Dorcas every day I sat down to write that she was doing things all wrong. She never listened to me or anyone. She just plowed ahead, all stubborn-like. I think she, like you, was just hoping that sheer determination would get her through it all.
I hated having to write the scene with Voldemort. I was sure that I would botch it beyond belief. But you got the point of that one too. Like a big ole' shell game.
Thanks, once again, for putting all your emotions into this review. And just so you know, I had a dream once that involved what it might have been like at that cottage in France. Dorcas wants me to tell you that she's learning how to grow broccoli and peas.