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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Wow, what a way to end the chapter! One thing I love about your writing style is that you're brilliant at action and fast-paced scenes. There was a fantastic breathlessness of the brothers' ride to their brother's aid. Additionally, I like the way that they are both still loyal to Antioch even though they know what kind of person he has become - his corruption has not affected their blood ties, which suits the historical period as well as the Potterverse as a whole, in which bonds of blood have an incredible impact on each character's actions.

Another great aspect of this chapter is that you don't make it explicit what happened to Antioch. There are hints, but you never outright say that Antioch was killed because of the elder wand even though the other two brothers know that's the case. The elder wand lurks in the back of the reader's mind, and becomes a more powerful object as a result. I don't know if you meant to do that or if it's just me over thinking things, but you've added a strong cloud of mystery around the three brothers' gifts from Death that really enhances the atmosphere of the story.

Ignotus is in a difficult position regarding Dominique and the cloak, too, and it was wonderful how you gave him that moment of internal conflict - it made him a more interesting character, and I look forward to see how you'll develop him further.

There was just one line that I was having trouble with in this chapter: It had a braid in the front and was pinned back. This description of the servant's hair was awkward. Perhaps you instead meant "he had a braid"?

This was an excellent chapter! I'm glad to be revisiting this story, and I'm eager to continue reading to see how you're going to work through all of the problems you've set forth thus far. There's so much you can do with this story - it's definitely one of the most creative stories on the archive. :D

Author's Response: Susan! Thank you so much! Really your reviews make my day. They are so beneficial for me because, really, sometimes I feel like I don't know what I'm doing with this at all. Really, I don't, and then you step in and save the day!

And thanks for pointing that out to me! Definitely a mess up that I must have missed. :P

Thank you SO MUCH for that compliment! And also, thank you for nominating this story for Best Unusual/AU ship! It means THE WORLD to me! :)


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