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Review:Jchrissy says:
The start of this chapter had me thinking, probably entirely too much, about how much easier it would be to be a wizard on the run. Like Rose points out, they can just wipe the memories of everybody they know, and even change their appearance. Interesting stuff, this magic.

I also keep forgetting to mention that I love Rose's personality in first person. A lot of the time you get these really good first-person stories, but there is so much sarcasm inside the characters head, or a constant of jokes, that it sort of drowns out the actual character. I like the mixture you have.. dry humor, enough of a serious side to make her feel like a genuine person... I just feel like she's very realistic.

Oh God, dinner at the Malfoy Manor seemed absolutely terrible. I like that you haven't made Draco this amazing warm father, and you haven't made a Astoria this sweet welcoming motherly type. It's obvious that Draco is a better father the Lucius was, but he still doesn't really seem like… Father of the year material? Rose's thoughts toward her parents in contrast to the Malfoy parents definitely put into perspective the two different ways these guys grew up. I come from a super outgoing, laid back type of family, and my fiancé's family is very very conservative and strict so I definitely know what Rose is feeling like when she enjoys being around one better :P

And your descriptions about the manor! Those were so well done, I felt like I was sitting in the stuffy, too formal room along with Rose. And dinner was incredibly awkward! Poor Scorpios, getting his delightful little subtle hints about being a disappointment, although they were so subtle, where they?

Oh and now this whole thing is giving me a bad feeling! Great Rose, what are you getting us into now?

Another awesome chapter, my dear. I'm excited to read the next!

Author's Response: Changing your identity as a wizard has got to be easier. They don't seem to be aware of forensics, either, but I bet you could even change your fingerprints magically.

This story is the first time I'd ever written first person. It's trickier than I expected, with the tenses, but I like it better than I thought I would. I still vastly prefer to read and write in third person, but with Rose I do like writing her in first. I try to keep her real, I've seen a lot of those trying-too-hard-to-be-eccentric sort of OC stories on the archive and they irritate me, kwim?

Dinner with the Malfoys is just wildly uncomfortable, even for Scorpius. His family is unpleasant. No, I don't see Draco as a doting father. He's mildly better than Lucius was, but that's not saying much. And I don't see Astoria as much of an active participant in the parenting process, she just sits back vaguely and says "that's nice" sort of thing.

I was picturing those classic British 18th century sort of rooms/decor when I wrote Malfoy Manor. Looks beautiful but not very comfy to actually live in. Scorpius takes it in stride as best he can, but he's never pleased to have to talk to his father. Poor guy.

Thank you so much for reviewing!


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