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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hi! I'm here again. I couldn't help myself, I just had to know what happened when Elena started trailing Ethan and I have to say that I am so glad I did. I got so much feels at the end of the chapter.

Okay, so before I start rambling about the Elena/Simon feels I'll give you a proper review.

I really love how Elena is so keen on proving herself worthy to Simon and Corinne. If I was her, I don't even think I'd have the heart to follow Ethan for as long as she did. She was so good at it, but she kind of dropped the ball when she rushed to buy the magazine and keep trailing Ethan. But I don't want to blame her, she's still new to this!

The fight scene was so intense! It was just spell after spell being thrown at each other. I really liked that bit, but not as much as I loved when Elena started worrying Simon. Now, some people might say that its just because Elena is a healer and it is in her instincts to heal those who are in need. I disagree. I think she has a crush on him, but she's not aware of it yet. she will be soon, though. Soon. Those two should get together real quick. I don't think I can take a lot more after this. Gah.

Amazing chapter! I absolutely loved it! ♥

~Izzy

48th review out of 100

Author's Response: Hi again :)

So it looks like that as you're reviewing, I'm trying to catch up with the responding.

So, I think you're pretty right about Elena. She's definitely wanting to feel worth while, and especially after the way Simon and Corinne have been acting, she feels like she has to show that she can be competent. Except, yeah, the thing is, she doesn't totally know how to do it all, and she's a bit nervous so she makes mistakes.

So it's good to hear that the fight scene worked for you--I feel like action scenes are always a bit challenging to write. You want to convey that adrenaline, heart racing feeling, but at the same time, you have to describe what's happening in a way that isn't (a) totally confusing and (b) doesn't detract from the pacing.

Hah, but we shall see about that last part. Spoilers, right? ;) Though I will say that Elena has enough experience as a Healer that she probably doesn't break down every time she thinks one of her patients has died.

It's so nice to read all the reviews you've been leaving! So thank you for that ♥

--Haley

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