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Review:TenthWeasley says:
Hello! I know this review's a bit late -- I keep making promises as far as reviews go that I just can't keep. For some reason my schedule gets more and more unpredictable with each passing day, but I suppose you're not interested in excuses!

I really like the first section of this chapter, and how you're setting up the canon interactions between Riddle and Hepzibah Smith. And I think that you characterized her really accurately, too! I've said this before, but fic writers who ground their stories in the fandom's canon always win my good seal of approval, and that's exactly what you've done here. Everything about the way you're writing him so far -- working in Borgin and Burke's, the way he carries himself, his inner and outer voice -- I toyed around before with the idea of a Tom Riddle/OC, and this is the exact sort of thing I was wanting to write, because I couldn't find it anywhere else. So the fact that you're writing him so excellently here is fantastic!

And I'm continuing to like Fee, of course, and (somewhat of a surprise to me) really enjoying Septimus Weasley, too. I'm very much looking forward to their future interactions! :) I think maybe the only thing to watch out for, concerning the pair of them, is not overdoing the Slytherin traits and stereotypes. Of course, Septimus would probably look unfavorably on them, which I do understand. But categorizing a place as where all the Slytherins go, or having someone do (or not do) something that "a Slytherin would do" and having someone explicitly mention it as such is perhaps a bit far-reaching into the categories, especially now they're out of school and aren't quite as tied down to their Houses. Not all Gryffindors are heroic, just as not all Slytherins are into the Dark Arts, etc. Despite my forums allegiances, I'm actually a Slytherin, so maybe it's just something I notice, but could also be a thing to watch out for. ;)

Ooh -- Fee's still going through with her decisions to live with Alphard, isn't she? Poor guy... I can already tell he really likes her. Even if she can't! We call that the friend zone, dear Alphard. Love the potion, too, and SNEAKY TOM. I really am thoroughly enjoying his characterization; I'll always read more about his pre-Voldemort days. :D Is he jealous of Alphard, I wonder? We know he can't love, because he was born under the influence of a love potion, but perhaps he could experience lust. I'm interested to see where you're going with this!

Ooh, and one quick typo: "he found it it impossible to reconcile the witch in front of him" has the word it doubled. :3

Really great chapter! And again, I apologize for taking a bit longer to review it than I earlier indicated. I hope you post chapter 7 soon, because truly, Kate -- I'm thoroughly, thoroughly enjoying your story thus far! ♥

Author's Response: Hello! I wouldn't worry too much - I'm much later than normal in responding to this review, as you can see! RL gets in the way of life really easily, and it's completely fine to be a little late! :)

Ahhh yes! The melted iced cake that is Hepzibah Smith! I felt the need to include her, since we see her and Tom -much- later in the story - namely, when he kills her and runs off with Hufflepuff's cup and Slytherin's locket, and of course it brings out another aspect of Tom's personality, as you said. And as for all your compliments - thank you so much for those; I'm honoured. :3 ♥

I see what you mean, and I'd like to clarify. Septimus is (in my mind) one of those people who sees everything in black and white, and automatically assumes that all Slytherins are bad. (I must confess to basing him a tiny bit off of Ron.) There are people in RL who are prejudiced - homophobics, racists etc and in that vein, Septimus is a Slytherinist. :P (Plus, as explored in chapter eight (and mentioned in chapter three, I think), he's named after his maternal relative Septimus Malfoy, and he's grown up seeing his mother treated vilely by her estranged relatives, so that would also colour his opinion.) :3

Oh, yes she is. And oh yes, he does. She can't, because of Tom dosing her with the potion, so we'll just have to wait and see if she does like him when her opinion isn't impaired by an evil best friend. ;) I won't comment on whether he's jealous of Alphard, but he can feel lust and other emotions. And that is all I'm saying for now. :P

Ooh, thank you for pointing that out! Bad typo! Even proofreading a chapter 50+ times doesn't get rid of pesky typos, as I'm sure you know. But thanks - I've fixed it now, and I'll reupload when I have a CI up. :3

Don't worry - the delay is completely understandable! And I'm really happy that you're still enjoying my story! Oh, and chapter seven will be up in a couple of weeks! :) ♥

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