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Review:CambAngst says:
First off, I have to give a shout out to Rosie (Remus / Perelandra) for bringing this story to my attention. You have a true fan in that one.

And now you have a true fan in me, too. These Fred/George stories always yank on the old heartstrings, but you did an extra-special job with this one. From the start, you pulled me right into the utter devastation that George is dealing with as he grieves for his brother. I was really impressed with the way that you projected those feelings of emptiness, loss and pain -- ordinarily I'd say that I loved it, but love is just an odd word to use for something so gut-wrenching. The way that you mixed and matched the physical sensations with the emotional was instantly recognizable to anyone who's ever had to cope with such a terrible loss.

When George flees the funeral, it took me a minute to get my head around what he'd done, and I really liked the effect. Everything felt disjointed and out of place, which must be exactly how George was feeling. Part of the beauty of what you did here, I think, is that I never felt at ease until Fred appears. Then the whole tenor of the piece changes.

I really love the idea of Fred's spirit -- whether or not it's "all in George's head" -- arriving to help George find his way out of the darkness. Their conversation had a perfect sort of ebb and flow to it. They wandered back and forth between cleverly irreverent and very serious. There were moments that made me want to laugh and moments that made me want to cry.

A couple of themes permeated the whole thing: one being the twins eternal need to be clever and different and the other being their deep interdependency with the rest of their family. I thought you did a fantastic job with George's descriptions of how the rest of the family was coping and an even better job of making Fred's concerns and desires come across so clearly and believably. I especially liked the way that Harry and Hermione have been integrated into the family as siblings of a sort, but there's also a clear sense of what they mean to Ginny and Ron, respectively.

A couple of other nice touches: when Fred curses a blue streak about Muriel being invited and when he asks George to take care of Angelina.

The ending to this was so uplifting. Sometimes it's hard to find the silver lining in the things that happened to the Weasleys during the war. I can't always do it, to be honest. But Fred really manages to set George on the path to recovery here.

Your writing was lovely in this. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it, and I'm a tough editor. ;)

I'm going to go thank Rosie for pointing me toward this. It was a wonderful read and I enjoyed every bit of it!

Author's Response: Hello :)

I was completely shocked when Rosie liked this story so much and then when she recommended it I was so touched. Thank you though for such an amazing review, I literally don't know how to respond...

I'm glad you thought the way I dealt with George's grief was right. I couldn't imagine what it would be like to lose one of my sisters and I think the fact that it's George's twin could only make the situation worse. I have been worried it was a bit melodramatic but I'm happy you didn't find it so.

I really wanted Fred to be able to help his brother and also bring back the notion that the ones who love us never truly leave us and I felt this was the best way to do it. I'm not really sure if it's just in George's head or not but it helps him and that was the important thing for me. Another reviewer called it twin magic which I really liked the idea of!

I'm glad you picked up on Harry and Hermione being part of the family. I always think they're counted by all the Weasleys so it made sense to me anyway.

I had orginally thought out what I was going to put in for when Fred curses about Muriel but I don't think it would have got through validation so I'll just leave it to your imagination. I also had to put in the bit about Angelina as I couldn't imagine the two of them getting together unless George knew Fred was ok with it.

Thank you again for leaving such an amazing review, I really appreciate it!

Lauren :)


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