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Review:academica says:
I have to comment that it seems like the speed of the relationship took off a little too fast for my liking in this chapter. I sort wish it was done from Draco's perspective instead of Hermione's, just so I could understand why he wanted to share a table with her and why he was so nice to her in Hogsmeade.

I also felt like Draco's behavior was a little back-and-forth in this chapter. He seems to shift a lot between teasing her cruelly or trying to get her to leave him alone and being nice to her or revealing his feelings. It was weird that he told her that he couldn't divulge his secret there at the end and then basically told her everything in the next breath. I really loved how you were taking this story slow before, and I'd love to see you continue with allowing little moments between Draco and Hermione to build up to a real connection.

I did like how Hermione thought about everyone else pairing up and wanted a boyfriend of her own. It helps set up the upcoming ship and adds a sympathetic layer to her, based on all that has been going on. I also think it was good to include just to remind people that Hermione isn't just a star student, she's a real girl with real feelings!

I'm on to the most recent chapter :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: The whole point of this story is to take their relationship slowly and I think at sometimes I may have just gotten really excited to get to their relationship that I might have added in some stuff that really should have been saved for future chapters. When I do a massive edit of the story I will look into this review more and see where exactly I can slow things down and work on building them up more. I've also tossed around the idea of writing this story from Draco's pov so my readers can get a better understanding of him and all of his actions but at the moment it is only an idea. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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