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Review:academica says:
Hi Erica! I'm having a really rough day and I felt like taking some time to relax and review would help calm me down. So I'm planning to review this story until I get through all the posted chapters. Thanks for agreeing to swap; I've been looking for more feedback on Post Scriptum, and I like having new reviews to answer now that I'm finally on top of my responses. Anyway, enough rambling!

I really liked your characterization of Cormac, and of Hermione, in this chapter. Cormac was really amusing and he seemed to fit perfectly in with his canon portrayal of being intrusive and always hanging around, trying to make a move on Hermione. I also liked Hermione a lot, in terms of her trying to avoid him. I especially liked her comments about the decorations; it was cool for you to bring in S.P.E.W. with that section.

I did notice a couple places where it seemed like you changed back and forth from present to past tense. For instance, in this sentence: "I sent Harry a pleading look to not tell Cormac anything, and then I slipped out one side of the curtain as Cormac slips in the other." -- you started out with past tense with "sent" and "slipped," and then it changed to present tense when Cormac "slips." You may just want to have your beta go back over this and double-check to make sure the tenses match.

On to the next chapter :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: I'm always so excited when someone comes to this story and reads (even more when they leave a review) but honestly your review makes me so happy. I'm so glad that you like my characterization of Cormac and Hermione in this chapter. It's always nice to hear when someone thinks that I've done a good job with her especially. Also I'm absolutely horrible at switching between tenses. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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