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Review:TenthWeasley says:
Hello -- here from the review tag with a review for you! I was this close to reviewing your other story, too, but then I realized this was a Marauders story and jumped right in. :) Marauders is one of my favorite eras to read, and I'm always looking for a good one!

Though this prologue was short, I actually liked the length -- it didn't drag things out unnecessarily, and it provided just enough information to make readers want to continue on to the next chapter. I like the similarities between Sirius and Thalia that you're already setting up, and at the same time, I like that they don't magically find each other and instantly become best friends. With the sort of story you seem to be setting up from your summary, it sounds like it would have been all too simple to make it happen like that, and I'm glad you didn't choose the easy way out!

Your writing style is actually quite good; there is a narrative voice here, and the prologue flows without much distraction at all, and that's always a really good thing. And thank you so much for sticking to canon details, too! Things like James's parents being older than most, or describing Petunia as horse-faced -- these might seem like small details, but it's things like that that really ground fan fiction into the Potterverse. Well done!

I'm curious to read on and see what you've got in store for Thalia and Sirius -- and James and Lily, too. I've got a Snape/OC trilogy going right now that's actually become quite involved in the James/Lily ship, and as a result I love seeing how other people write them. But anyway. I'm rambling. ♥ Thank you for an enjoyable first chapter!

Author's Response: Hi! I have to agree the Marauders is definitely the best era, mainly thanks to James and Sirius, who are by far my favourite characters ;D

I'm glad that you thought that length of prologue was good, as I feel if a prologue drags on and on, it takes away the meaning of it and it might as well be a chapter!

Yeah I didn't want Thalia and Sirius to instantly become friends, as that's unrealistic, I want them to slowly realise how similar they are, and they're not the only one who has a bad family!

Yeah I love my canon facts, so I'm glad that you liked them to! Thank you for the great review, it really was lovely :')

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