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Review:Alopex says:
I think this is the last review for tonight. I'll continue later on.

I have one itsy bitsy nitpick (you may have noticed by now that sometimes I fixate on tiny things :P ). The note Dumbledore sent was addressed to Sirius, which surprised me a tiny bit considering that he had addressed him as Mr. Black in the previous chapter. The professors also seem to refer to students by their last names most of the time in the books, though there are some exceptions.

Anyway. I like how this chapter continues developing information that is relevant to the outside world, as well as to the lives of your characters post-Hogwarts. I know I've said similar stuff already, so I won't keep discussing it.

I wonder if Lily is going to be involved with it all soon as well?

Speaking of Lily, I'm actually glad that she wasn't present in this chapter. I know I remarked before that you were doing a good job of incorporating her into the circle of friends. However, I am also enjoying that she still sits with her own friends at the Gryffindor table sometimes, and that the Marauders + Beth still have their own little meetings and activities and such without her.

I think it was also a good call that Severus wasn't present either. Sure, the Snape/Beth romance angle has to be advanced somehow, but you had a couple of chapters that did quite a bit of that. Now you are turning the focus elsewhere and advancing something else for a little while. No doubt Severus will be back soon. :P Changing the focus around is a decent way to slow the story down, develop multiple angles, and build up to them all fitting together in different ways down the road.

Author's Response: I have never noticed that Dumbledore addressed Sirius as 'Sirius' in that letter -- and I have no idea why I would have written something like that in the first place. :P Thank you for being astute enough to point it out!

When I started writing this, I was a bit worried about getting in enough of the information about the world outside of Hogwarts, the war and all that -- because it did affect the students, and it's not something I've seen in a lot of Marauder fic. So the fact that you're commenting on it and noticing its development is actually a relief on my end! :) And it's the same, I think, with Lily, the feeling of relief after seeing that your impression of her was kind of what I was wanting to get across. It's another common theme in Marauders stories that I sort of wanted to omit. There seem to be a lot of those, I've come to find in responding to reviews!

Severus will definitely be back soon, but he does need a break every once in a while, as it were. :P I'm looking forward to seeing your opinions of him when he next crops up! Thank you, as always, for your lovely Christmas reviews. I'm glad you took the time to read such a significant amount of this story for me!

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