This was, I think, the first James/Lily novel I've ever read (which is perhaps a bit hypocritical of me, since I've finished two-and-a-third novels in which James/Lily is a very centric ship). I very much enjoyed this! I never thought, starting out, that you would have such an interesting take on the way the Marauders spent their final year at Hogwarts. I've never read anything else that comes close, and that originality factor is awesome in setting your story apart from others before it.
I think perhaps the only thing that turned me off this story is all the swearing -- I do understand, of course, that teenagers swear, but it's a personal preference. I did not let it detract me from the story, you will be glad to know! You have a smooth writing style that was pleasant to read, and the plot intrigued me from start to finish.
Great work, and congratulations on finishing this -- it really is an accomplishment!
Author's Response: Hi there! :)
Wow, this is a very old story of mine, thinking about it -- the fact that you enjoyed it so much means a lot, so thank you very much for this review. I personally think there are many, many things wrong with this story, lol (I deleted it from my MuggleNet Fan Fiction author page, actually), so I am really flattered you enjoyed reading it and that you thought it so original, despite the fact that I wrote this when I was fourteen/fifteen.
Hmm, I think I was quite defensive to other reviewers who had similar objections regarding the swearing; I do think, looking back, that it was quite gratuitous at times, so I understand where you're coming from. Depending on the story, swearing may or may not fit in -- at times, I do feel like maybe Lily swore a bit too much (though the Marauders, ha, would definitely swear a lot -- well, at least Sirius and James would XD).
I'm really so pleased that you enjoyed Checkmate; it was quite a popular story here, which makes me sad because nothing I've written since has been quite as popular. (This really isn't me self-pimping -- LOL.) I guess part of the reason for that is because the fandom is slowly shrinking, sadly, which is a shame because my latest works are of far better quality than this -- though, like I said, that is not an invitation for you to go and read/review them, although you're more than welcome to if you want, hehe.
Thank you for the review; it means even more to me because of how accomplished an author you are, with winning a Dobby and all! :D