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Review:Elleinad says:
Hi! I just started reading this story a few days ago and I must say I completely love it! To be honest the reason I read it is because its one of Dark Whisper`s favorites. I also love dramiones and its depressing how terrible some people write Draco. Its nice to be able to truthfully say that you do a great job with him.

A couple of critics. First I want to point out that you use a lot of the same diction. For example these two (as in Draco and Hermione) are always `flush up against` each other and it gets a little tiring. If you used a greater variety of words the story flowers better. When you repeat phrases it kind of pulls me out of it. Another thing is grammar. I would really appreciate it if you took some time to proof read or even send your chapters to a trustworthy friend for editing before you upload. That`s really all I have to complain about.

Now for the good things! Let me just say, I really enjoy how insanely pregnant you make Hermione. I just love it when author`s deliberately flaw their characters. For me it just makes thing more realistic. I actually like your hormonal and confused Hermione better than this other version I read where she can literally do no wrong and if anything bad happened it was because people were jelious of her (please forgive my crappy spelling). For the record I like relateable characters and yours are just that!

By the way, I'm sorry I never reviewed any of the other chapters. I really wanted to read all of it before judging whether I liked it or not. Now I can truthfully answer a heartfelt yes to that question. I hope this extremely long, sort of rambely review makes up for me not reviewing the rest. Please update soon! If I'm kept waiting too long I may just ramble about how much I miss you in reviews of other chapters! :D

Hopefully it won't come to that,
Elleinad

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