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Review:Aphoride says:
Woot, first review! :D I couldn't resist when I saw that you'd just got this validated and all that jazz. I've read a couple of Tom/Minerva's and while I don't think anything much would have happened between them (he's just too heartless and she's a little too strong to be taken in by him, I've always thought) it is, as you say, the possibility of them clashing which is so appealing.

I love the way you've made Tom so effortlessly manipulating and yet charming and able to switch from one to the other with a click of his fingers. I also love how you've included references to the Lord Voldemort he becomes with the twisted, cruel smile and his faithful minions. He seems almost more than Voldemort because he's still focused, he's just less obsessed and, in a way, more dangerous.

Minerva was great. I love the idea that she was taken in by him at first, but then realised what he was to and what he was about and stopped and walked away. It's really interesting that you've chosen to say that he helped her improve and get more powerful (it's also an interesting take on magical power - I haven't seen a lot of people before say that it could be improved) and use her talents to great effect.

If you continued this or did something similar or whatever I'd love to see you include Dumbledore or other students, and branch it out from just the two of them, if you do, because people's reactions or non-reactions could be interesting depending on what they know or suspect. While this was lovely and focused, it didn't have much else to it, if you know what I mean. Also, I'd love to know where this fits in in the timeline - are they sixth year or seventh year or what? It's not hugely important, but some hint as to their age would be great.

That being said, I love how you haven't set it in any particular place and have focused on what she's done to him and how they've effected each other rather than anything else. It makes the story feel so much more intense. I also liked how you had it in her pov but allowing us to see so much of him as well, and the characterisation and pacing were both really, really good.

I really enjoyed this! :)

Aph xx

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