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Review:Gryffindor Secret Santa says:
Slughorn snuck himself right in here! I have to say that, though that wasn't expected, it makes perfect sense. And even though it's clear that Netterheim isn't this nice bit of rainbows, and he clearly doesn't really have Severus's best interest in heart... I still like him. In a way where I probably shouldn't, but I do anyway so I figure I might as well embrace it.

I think you played the scene between Severus and Karkaroff *very* well. You gave him enough to keep him in good graces, and anyone with half a brain knows that something being done right is better than being done quickly. So even while Severus is buying him more time, he's still getting deeper and it makes him sick and argh.

I really wish these two were going to get a happy ending. Anyway you can go AU with this? Maybe bribery with cookies??

You've done something very unique in those last few sections. They're incredibly confusing, but the kind of planned confusions where it's obvious that, even if I can't connect all the dots just yet, you meant that and I'm going to trust that you'll make that all a bit more clear when the time is right. PS nothing is creepier than an amusement park. Nothing.

I liked the small sections you had toward the end. It was like i was looking left, then throwing my head right so I wouldn't miss that, then back to left.. it really made for a necessary kind of intensity that just cemented me to the page.

Santa likes mysteries, you know. HO HO HO. It's almost time for me to go back to the north pole and help Mrs. Clause clean from the mess of this Christmas season. You know, she's always letting Dasher sleep in the house. Makes for some serious messes.

Author's Response: Hi Santa!

It's so good to see you one last time before going back to the North Pole and helping Mrs. Claus with what promises to be a thankless job... snarffle!

I like Netterheim too. Not sure why, but he was my favorite OC in this. I guess it was because of all the unharnessed power.

Severus and Karkaroff's scene needed to make all kinds of sense, and I'm so happy you thought it played out so well. Sadly, this story is already completed, otherwise, I'd maybe take you up on the cookie bribe. I worked so hard for these two and it's all going downhill from here on out.

I felt the same way about the amusement park. Part of me was cackling with glee that I could put Severus in a Muggle amusement park and ahve it make total sense, and the other part of me was shuddering at all the creep that could potentially happen there. It was a fantastic setting to work with. I know it was a lot of smoke and mirrors, and my betas were cringing with all the assumptions I was making about my readers being able to follow it, but I'm glad you trusted me enough to get through that section without major complaints. Some of it does become clearer as we move forward.

I'm so happy that Santa likes mysteries. You have been a great Secret Santa. Thanks so much for my gifts!


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