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Review:academica says:
Hello AD! I'm stopping by for Review Tag :)

This is a great little sequel to Ending It. To think, if Teddy and Dominique had parted ways without that last letter, Victoire might never have known, and the wedding might have gone as planned. I like the emotion in this piece--it must be difficult to write with such intensity, but I could really feel the pain that all three of the characters experienced.

A couple of small critiques--I'm a little confused by her name. Wouldn't she be Victoire [middle name] Lupin, with the only change being the last name? I just don't understand why Teddy's name is in there. I also think you made a small error when Victoire accused Dominique of having an affair with her boyfriend--he is her fiance now.

I would love to see you turn this into a trilogy, of sorts, and write about how the rest of the family reacted to the affair and the cancelled wedding. Perhaps it would help bring closure to everyone.

Great job :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing! I always look forward to your reviews!

I am glad that you liked this little piece. It was a plot bunny that attacked me at 5 AM xP

It feels so nice to hear that you think the emotion in the narrative was intense and that you could feel the pain my characters were feeling. I always try to write as much emotional intensity as possible, but somehow I can never be as good as writers like you xP

As for the name issue, many times I hear people saying their name as "Own name-husband name-husband family name" and thus I went with that format. Not sure if it was right or wrong. Oh, and thanks for catching that fiance mistake, I'll correct that right away!

I didn't plan of turning this into a trilogy but now that you have mentioned it, I'll think about it xD Thanks for the idea!

And thanks so much for the review once again!


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