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Review:Secret Santa says:
Santa's back! I momentarily got stuck in a chimney, which is why these gifts are later than I would of liked.

So, I really like this chapter as well. I think it carries on really well from the previous chapter. It's been about a month (I think) and the characters haven't changed so drastically that I don't recognise them, yet they have seemed to grow up slightly… They're just as cheeky, but they're more subtle about what they're doing. The way the sort of plant a seed of suspicion, by suggesting the Philosopher's stone hasn't actually been destroyed, and metaphorically watering it, by telling them about the devil's snare, knowing the cunning Slytherins would go looking for it, and the immortality it could offer.

It made me laugh how 3 days later Longbottom calls them into his office explain why 4 Slytherins where hospitalised trying to find the Philosopher's stone in the Devil's Snare in one of his Greenhouses… I don't think I thought they would actually go looking for it, although it surprised me that the Slytherins waited 3 days to go and look for it, because it may just be a stereotypical view of mine, but I would of thought they would of gone to find it straight away. But I actually prefer it they way you wrote it, because it conveys the suspicion the Slytherins' have of the information the Gryffindors' gave them, but they ultimately risk it because they're so power-hungry.

I think it's good that they didn't get away with it this time, because I don't think the story would be as good if the got of the hook every time. It teaches them to be more careful about what they're doing.

Great chapter as usual! Santa is happy they got given you :)
I'll be back with more presents soon :)

-Santa xx

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! :) I'm really glad you liked it, especially the way I've tried to subtly develop the characters. I really appreciate your reviews, Santa! :)

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