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Review:Mystique says:
Hi, I'm here with your requested review.

This story is refreshing, I think, from all the other Marauders stories that are out there. I've never really read a story like this and that made me enjoy it all the more.

Just one thing that I noticed was sometimes when a word was italicized, then it happened to join with the following word. Such as in this sentence and seeing as I can't italicize it, I put little bracketey thingys around it.

"to be in a{relationship} with James Potter"

I never really considered that Lily might be quite mathematical and scientist like, but it was definitely funny to read about. And your characterization of her was really good. I loved this line here,

"Of course, these were wizards she was dealing with - sure, transfiguring an animal into a water-goblet made complete sense, but as soon as you tried to talk chemistry with them they blanked out."

It definitely does describe wizards!

I really liked how you just jumped straight away into the story, however it left me wondering just how Lily invented this formula.

I'm really looking forward, though, to find out just how Lily asks James out. That should be really funny.

I hope I helped and feel free to re-request.
Charlie

Author's Response: Ugh, stupid italics :/ I'll definitely fix that up and watch for it in future chapters!

Thank you so much! This review was lovely - the fact that people seem to enjoy my characterization of Lily hear is really wonderful to hear, because she is quite different from how she's normally written and I was worried it wouldn't work :/ But I'm thrilled to know that it didn't turn out all bad.

And Lily's invention of the formula will be explained in flashbacks later on, promise ;)

Thank you so much for the review, love! I'm super grateful, and I'm glad you seemed to enjoy it :)

xx Molly


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