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Review:Pixileanin says:
Gryffie tag!

Now this was a great idea for a one-shot. Firstly, I have to say that you hand;ed second-person very well. I've never attempted to write it, because it seems like it would come off as awkward as anything, but it worked really well here, especially with the detached way that George was feeling when he was called up to say something at the funeral.

The easy dialogue that the brothers fall into almost instantly was really well done as well. I could hear them in my head going back and forth as George regained something of what he lost in those moments.

"Well grease my hair and call me Snape."

That made me laugh. And so did several other of your lines in this piece. You have a knack for mixing up the serious and the comedic and I think that it was just the right balance here. I never forgot that I was reading about the twin pranksters. You captured them very well and I enjoyed reading this one-shot.

I don't know why, but it's not letting me do a review while signed in. This is Pixileanin from the forums, just in case that didn't come through when I hit the "submit review" button.

Great piece!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for a lovely review!! I didn't orignally write in in the second person and I kept changing it back and forth for a while because I wasn't convinced it worked to start with but I'm glad I went with it in the end!

Ahh I love the twins, they're dialogue is so fun to write! I have to admit, that is one of my fav lines too!

Thanks again for a lovely review!
Lauren


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