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Review:Gryffindor Secret Santa says:
Ho ho ho! A bit of a late present for you!

I hope you don't mind that I didn't review a few chapters, but they are very addicting, I just wanted to keep reading! And I've decided to stop here to review.

This was a very, very steamy chapter! I think you handled the subject so well by making it both intimate but still tasteful. I was so excited by the time it finally happened that I just wanted to clap for them! But I suppose they wouldn't appreciate them standing at the edge of the bed clapping... it may ruin the moment.

I really like that you've found ways to include Lily in all this. I'm really not a Severus Lily shipper myself, so I wouldn't have been upset if you wouldn't have included anything that related to that, but I do think the fact that you did really helped tie into canon. I love the idea that it was more of his guilt causing him to protect Lily, but that he was still stuck about doing it. It really fit in with this character.

The first section with Netterheim was actually really fun. I couldn't help but be amused by him kind of messing with her just for fun. It wasn't really nice, but he's never come off as a warm fluffy man anyway. Then her and Severus's pathetic attempt to cover up and making ridiculous excuses. Hahaha.

This was such a great chapter! Merry late Christmas!

Author's Response: Hey Santa! Yo're not late. You're great!

Addicting chapters?? That's the best compliment I've had all year! I don't mind at all that you kept reading. That's what it's all about, anyway.

I'm glad you found this chapter tasteful. I didn't want to go too far with it, but it was important for the characters to make the connection that they did. It may have ruined the moment if you had applauded from the end of the bed, but with all that has happened to Severus, I'm sure he would just groan and add it to his long list of humiliating life experiences. Though, you might want to check what's in your food or drink for a while afterwards.

I'm also greatly relieved that you found Lily's place in this story to be acceptable. She's too important to Severus' character to leave out, but she's not the main focus of the story, so it was a puzzle to fit in. I also love the idea that his guilt drove him to look out for her more than his fascination with her.

Netterheim was loads of fun to write. He's a slimy, secret man with a wicked sense of humor. I think he's also allergic to fluff, so...

Thanks so much, Santa! I love you!

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