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Review:Secret Santa says:
It's Santa time again!

Okay, first things first. Like I said in my last review, I really like your dialogue. It flows really well and seems natural. Also everything is well written. I haven't seen many typos/errors other than a few missing dots and commas. Well done!

Your characters are interesting, and I think you're doing a good job in showing different sides of them, and also making them different from each other. There are many new characters and I'd like to know more of them, but I think you've found the right pace to introduce them and give us some information, without overwhelming your readers. That's always important.

Why did Tiffany get in the changing room if she wasn't supposed to see it? I think that was left a bit unclear and could use some more information, or at least speculation.

I'm liking this Matt guy very much. He seems nice.

And Albus! I like him, and I can see he's really trying to get along with Tiff. Why doesn't she like him? Has he done something? Maybe we'll find that out later.

Okay, not liking the idea of the after party with no teachers. Especially since they're just going to leave? I mean, it sounds cool and everything, but really? Those teachers would lose their jobs if they did that, so I just don't see it happening. But maybe I'm just too old d:

I think you do a good job with your descriptions and details, but there could always be more of it. Just a few sentences here and there maybe. But it's just a suggestion. It already works the way it is too.

Keep writing! I like the idea of your story, so you should definitely update this soon!

Happy holidays!

~Santa

Author's Response: Hello again :) Thank you :) aha, punctuation is my one true enemy :P Thank you for all the help again!
-Julia xx

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