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Review:Secret Santa says:
It's me again, your Secret Santa!

I liked this chapter. The pacing was much calmer than in the first one, and I think it worked.

I like your characters and that they're all different. I think James is my favourite. There's just something about him that I like. Maybe because he's so nice and supportive of Tiffany (whom I like too)

Luke is fun too. Only thing that bothers me with him is that he's supposed to be a professor, so I think the way he acts with Tiffany when there are other people around is a bit unprofessional. I get it that they're cousins, but what about all the other people who don't know it? I bet it was quite awkward for Harry and Ginny to witness that little banter between them when the families were saying their goodbyes.

I really liked your descriptions in this one. About the new school and especially the portkey scene! That was done really well!

Also, I like your dialogue. I think it's nice and that the characters sound like their age. So nice work with that!

Okay, I have to admit, I don't like the idea of a shared room at all. I don't think that any teacher would agree to put two underage students of opposite sex in the same room. So if that's not completely necessary for your story, I'd change that. I mean, I'm sure there will be a lot of drama and awkward situations and so on, but I just don't think it would happen really.

Also, a little tip. You don't have to press enter after every sentence. It would flow much better if you combined them into longer paragraphs.

But yeah, that's just a technicality. Other than that I really enjoyed this, ad I think you have a good story in your hands! Keep writing!


Author's Response: Hello Santa :) Thank you for your review! It's been really helpful :) I'm glad you like the characters, and I get what you mean about the room thing.. Thank you for the advice
- Julia xx

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