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Review:Secret Santa says:
HOHOHO, Merry Christmas! And big apologies for being so late! This Santa has had a very busy Christmas and when it would've had time, HPFF wasn't co-operating /: but I'm here now so better late than never, right?

Okay, let's get started. Tiffany! She's one big firecracker waiting to explode, isn't she? I'd hate to be Albus right now...

I really like the idea of exchange students! Usually it's a student transferring to Hogwarts, but this time we get to see another wizarding school so that will make things more interesting and fresh! Great idea!

Suggestion: Maybe add more dialogue tags? At somepoints I got a little confused who was talking. Especially in the scene with McGonagall. There was just so much shouting going on and I wasn't sure who was wo anymore and then suddenly she's being dragged away by her cousin/professor (which was a nice thouch also btw) So maybe work on that scene a bit more?

But I really enjoyed this chapter and think it was a lovely start. Can't wait to read more!

Happy holidays and see you soon!

~Santa

Author's Response: Yay! Santa! ;)

Ohh Tiff, she must be a subconscious way for me to vent..

Thank you, but I can't take any of the credit, there was a challenge on the forums :)

Mmm, almost everyone has said that so I might go back and edit it at some point..

Thank you Santa ;)
Happy Holiday's! xx


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