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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hi there... finally getting to the review you requested.

Ok, first of all let me say I really enjoyed this story. You definitatly have my interest with the family who have moved in and the mysterious boy who Rose seems to have taken a liking too! I have a sneaking suspicion that the child may not be his? Not sure why, I'm probably completely wrong but that's just the inkling I've got.

I thought you had a really great opening with the diary entry. It was a really nice start to the story!

Another thing I loved about the story is that you did it in the first person from Rose's perspective and I really loved her thought process throughout the whole thing. I thought you kept the whole thing fun and light hearted and really got the whole teenage drama romance thing so well, so go you! Well done!

I love it when people add in little snippits from the books and you had a couple that really made me smile. Phoebe being Seamus' daughter, I loved that! And the reference to her blowing things up I thought was really cute! I also love Oliver Wood so the fact you got him there too was really great!

Your characterisation of Molly was really great. She was very like the Molly in the books with her grandchildren so well done again!

Oh, Fred and James! The senior versions of these pair are my fav characters in Harry Potter and so your description of them being exactly like their namesakes made me smile. Its exactly how I would picture them to be honest!

Just be careful, in a couple of places your sentences don't quite make sense and your repeat words. While it doesn't take away from the story, I think it would just improve the flow slightly and make a good story even better! Hopefully you will be able to iron these out with your beta!

This is really great start to the story though, it's really grabbed my attention! Well done!

Lauren

Author's Response: Hi :D
Thank you for the review!!
You may or may not be right :)

I chose Adele to be Seamus' wife because of a picture about Adele's song Set Fire To The Rain and Seamus' reply is 'that's one hell of a woman' - I though they would go brilliantly together :D

I also love Fred and James bot young and old and I deffinatly see James II and Fred II a pair of pranksters like their namesakes.

Thanks again and I may be re-requesting

-Potterfan310
Soph :D


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