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Review:Gryffindor Secret Santa says:
Wow, what an original start to a Severus Snape fiction! I really enjoyed that you began with Karkaroff, because he's someone we don't read about much and that immediately had me interested.

One thing that I think helped to really define his character was when he's thinking about the book he pried from the old man.. he cares not even a tiny bit that he killed them because he took a life, but he's thinking he shouldn't have right away so he'd have more answers. That sets the tone for the DE just perfectly.

I like all the new things you've created in this chapter. Severus working under someone who sounds to be one of the greatest potions masters, him being in a position where he really has no control over what happens to him may be my favorite quality. We only see him as the confident man who, by the end of it we know, is besting the world's most powerful man. Spying and hiding things from Voldemort which aren't discovered until it's way too late. Seeing him here, as a more fearful and reluctant death eater, having to follow each order or knowing it will be his life.. is a very lovely contrast to the man he becomes.

Also, the line about loving his potions because he has control over them has so much insight about him in just one small line. He wanted control over Lily, he wanted control over everything at Hogwarts, he isn't a man who likes being out of control... and we're seeing why here. Or, at least, what he was like when he had very little control over anything. Awesome touch.

It's so sad that the last time he saw his parents was three Christmases ago! And now he's too late...


I really liked this first chapter! I think you have an awesome writing style and am excited to read more!

Author's Response: Oooh, Santa! What a nice surprise!

I'm glad you appreciated the "new things" I put into this story about Severus and his early days with the DE. I really stretched the common perceptions we have of Snape's character to fit the man I wanted to write about in this story. I tried my hardest to have it eventually melt into canon, but you know how that goes. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't. I'm so glad you read and reviewed the first chapter of this piece.

Thank you, Santa!


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