Hi ♥ so I tagged chapter 6 a while back, and I didn't realize you'd requested for it in my thread, so now I'm fulfilling you request with chapter 7! :)
In this chapter what stuck out at me the most was Dorcas's absolute disregard for her own life, her own safety.. when she ventures to Knockturn alley and to listen at the door. I think that was such a perfect touch, because right now she's still living off of what happened. She probably feels incredibly invisible while still wanting to test her own mortality, and she's acting without thinking... something Mad Eye would NOT approve of!
You absolutely had my heart racing throughout that entire section. From the point of Dorcas seeing the masked men, to casting her silencing charm to going to listen at the door... it was very stressful and I really just wanted to skip a few paragraphs to make sure she'd be okay :P.
One thing you also did with Dorcas in this that I really loved was her comment about there being on bread. When bad things happen, scary things, we tend to focus on the mundane. Like a wife whose husband just died and she holds it all together, until she realizes she didn't get make enough pie for the gathering after the funeral. Then she looses it. Dorcas obviously wasn't as extreme with this, but it falls under the same principal. She has nothing else to say, nothing else she can even think, so she points out something simple. Something mundane that doesn't matter in the tiniest bit.
I think you are doing a magnificent job with Severus having his own sort of conflicting emotions. He's one of those characters that seems like he does a lot of things 'for someone else' when he really does them because he doesn't know what else to do. He's thinking that Dorcas doesn't need him anymore, but she really probably could use someone to force her into taking comfort. But he knows he's too scared to let her her need him, he doesn't want to need her, he doesn't know what to do! He's really a big sad puppy sometimes, you know. Anyway I think that the fact that he cares about her, that she cares about him, but the knowledge that neither of them should really comes across well.
And it seems Severus has a decision to make... hmm hmm hmm.
I think this chapter is so far one of my favorites. The intensity, the move of emotions from Dorcas's self destructive behavior, her fear, her realization that her life came very close to ending... all made for an awesome read. You continue to bring these two together without rushing it, and give there characters a chance to make sense.
Awesome chapter, darling ♥
Author's Response: Ahh, I feel spoiled!
Chapter 7 had a lot going on as far as character development, didn't it? You hit the nail on the head with Dorcas and why she did what she did. The "no bread" line was one of my favorites in this chapter. I'm so glad that it resonated with you like that. It was totally meant to do just that.
And you read Severus correctly too, which is a huge relief for me. I did try really hard to get these characters to make some kind of sense, both separately and together. It took a lot of revision (and many sessions with my wonderful character relationship therapist, Melian, who helped me hash out the character arcs when things got squirrely) to get them where I thought I wanted them. Knowing that you *got* it makes that all worth while.
Thanks so much for another fantastic review!