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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Wow, Molly! This is a powerful story, with amazing depth, not only of feeling, but also of character. You've conveyed a lot of history and plot, a full novel's worth, in a one-shot, not even a long one-shot at that, and I'm in awe of the result.

There's a lot of things I really like about this story from the atmosphere and descriptions to the way you've portrayed the characters. You also include wonderful details, little banal things that emphasize Hermione's depressed state and how she's trapped in this very limited, domestic world. Ron feels a connection to that place with his admiration of the view and the water (via the diamond), but it's not where she belongs. It's the greatest difference between them, that he is used to those little comforts while her curiosity and need for adventure eat away at her. It fits very well into canon, which is something I always like to see when authors tackle Draco/Hermione - it's the greatest challenge of that ship.

It's not like anything I've seen done before with a Ron/Hermione/Draco triangle, and it's very refreshing in the way that you situate Hermione between the two wizards. She's the strongest of the three, and I don't think she realizes how similar the two of them are, how one has physically run away while the other has psychologically faded - they're both absent in their own way, so deeply affected by the war that they can't properly function. What's sad is that it's Hermione who suffers most - she can't have what she desires, and instead has to sacrifice herself to look after Ron. And the depth that you give her character is incredible. I can easily see this story working outside of the Potterverse; it has a darkly realistic feel that makes it compelling.

There was one little typo in the line "she reaches up to where her hands still rests upon her shoulder" - it should be "his hands" I think. That would make more sense.

Needless to say that I really enjoyed this and I look forward to reading more of your stories! It's great to see you on HPFF, Molly! :D

Author's Response: Gah, Susan, this review just made me flail all over the place. Thank you so much n_n xx

I can't stand Dramione when it's done unrealistically or in a way that couldn't fit it with canon, and I especially can't stand it in stories where Ron is portrayed as this terrible villain - I much prefer to have Hermione at equal amounts of fault for the failure of their relationship as him, so I'm glad that much sort of came across in the story.

Thanks for pointing that typo out, btw. I'm a notoriously bad proofreader XD

Thanks again Susan! Such a lovely review, it made my night xx

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