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Review:Santa In A Dress says:
EEEK!! XD *hugs*

I'm most definitely a Lucius/Narcissa shipper; I feel that their personalities are so different when they're behind closed doors to when they're in public, and you remained so true to that!

The descriptions that you use were wonderful and so incredibly accurate. The way that you describe Narcissa as looking older than she is; how you place emphasis on her family's honour and blood status; the emotion that she feels for Lucius: they all add up to a beautiful characterization of Narcissa. You're so talented! ♥

I quite loved this line: Family honor, she thought to herself with a chuckle. Now I'm starting to sound like my mother. Everyone has moments when they sound like one or both of their parents, and it was excellent that you included this, as it made this one-shot all the more realistic.

While reading this, I was under the impression that Lucius was stopping Narcissa from being with her beloved, and that the fate she'd dreamt she have became nothing but a fairytale. I was so shocked when it was revealed that her beloved was in fact Lucius!

Although, I do have to admit that what threw me off was the fact that Narcissa didn't know Lucius' family history. I always see the pure-blood families as socializing with each other regularly (hence how Draco knew Crabbe and Goyle before they started Hogwarts) and also because Narcissa and Lucius attended Hogwarts together. (Lucius was born was in 1954 and Narcissa was born in 1955, so depending on when in the year they were born, it's entirely possible that they could be up to two years apart at Hogwarts. I'm more inclined to say up to one year though, as the Narcissus flower blooms in November to April but more commonly during the spring, so I tend to think of Narcissa being born in spring 1955 and Lucius would therefore be either in her year or the year above her. And yes, I just typed all of this from memory. *blushes*)

In addition, I'm sure if you've been dating someone for two years, you would be able to recognize their voice, so I'm wondering why Narcissa didn't recognize Lucius'. It's entirely possible that she didn't recognize it as she was utterly convinced that it wasn't possible for Lucius to be there, but in that case I would advise including something to mention that. That might just be me, though. :P

And now to the ending. I loved the ending! It was so sweet and wonderfully, a happy ending for Narcissa! (And for Lucius, considering that he was also going through similar torment!) The way he hugged her and smiled sweetly and reassured her that they were going to be together after all... I had a MAJOR case of the feels; so major, in fact, that it provoked the reaction at the beginning of this review! I know I've said this before, but you really are incredibly talented! ♥

Author's Response: EEEK, Santa!! Thank you SO much; you spoil me!! :)

D'aww, thank you! *blushes* I'm really glad that you liked the descriptions! This piece was a bit different for me... "different" as in I tried to go about writing it differently than my other pieces. I'm glad to see it payed off!

*Hangs head in shame* Yes, the whole Lucius-and-Narcissa-not-knowing-each-other thing is something other reviewers have pointed out, and, in total honesty, it's something I just really didn't think through before I wrote it. I didn't really research their ages or anything, or when they'd have been at Hogwarts. In fact, I was hit by this plunny during class one day and pretty much wrote it all in THAT day. I've thought about going back and editing that, but I'm really trying to focus on "Keeping Secrets" right now, and I don't have much spare time. But as soon as I do, I'm going to give that a bit of an overhaul!! Thanks SO much for the info; you've definitely saved me a bit of research. (And don't blush about knowing all that by heart; the fact that you do is totally AWESOME! I know fact about some of my characters like that as well!) :D

And you're totally right, she WOULD recognize his voice. That's something else that I thought about a bit too late. That's another thing that I'll definitely revamp when I get the chance!

Awww; I'm glad you liked the ending!! It honestly gave me a case of the feels as I was writing it! And even now I can't stop smiling when I re-read it!!

Thank you SO, SO, SO MUCH!!!


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