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Review:sour_grapes_snape says:
I don't know what it is, but there's just something I love about the bad tempered, uneffeminate female character. Probably because I see something of myself in them, to a certain degree. I liked seeing Al's perspective of Gen and I think it will add a nice touch to the story to have both their perspectives.

I think you pulled off a male POV very well (and thank you for the shout-out!) My best advice for doing this, and I've mentioned this before, is, when writing a male character, to not focus on trying to make him "sound like a guy." You just need to figure out what it is exactly that makes Al who he is, and write from there. Everything should then go smoothly :) And you already seem to be on the right track, so kudos to you!

The part I really liked was how Gen helped Al to escape from the crazed Hufflepuff girl's. It shows a good balance to their friendship. Al helped her with the unfortunate tampon problem in the last chapter, and Gen helped him here. I can't wait to read more about their friendship.

Wonderful work, Akansha. Can't wait for the next update!

With much love,
-Laura

Author's Response: I agree. Uneffiminate, angry young characters are very relatable to me as well, because they resemble the tomboyish part of me. And i'm planning to do every other chapter or so in Al's perspective. It really is quite nice to think what he thinks.

Thank you so much. Part of the credit rightly goes to you, and yes, I will seriously keep your advice in mind, make him sound like Al, rather than focus on the gender issue.

That part was so necessary, like, because I really needed to show that it's not always the girl who needs saving. Like Gen put it, she is no damsel-in-distress, but they act as each others' knights-in-shining-armours. And don't worry, i'm planning to explain their friendship's beginning in the next chapter. As well as introducing a bunch of other new OCs.

Update will be as soon as possible, because i've already started writing the next chapter.

Thank you, thank you, thank you!
-Akansha.

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