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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Hey, it's Whiskey from Holiday Review Swap!

I liked the beginning of this story very much! You didn't waste any time or space on superfluous description because late 19th century London is a setting we all know very well.Nor did you try to delve much into the character's mind, leaving him to remain a mystery for a while longer. It was quite gripping.

If I could offer some advice, then it would be to limit the amount of times you used the word "he". Try replacing it with "the fugitive", "the prisoner", "the man" etc. Or try rephrasing the sentences into a bit more complicated format so that you don't need to use it at all.

Also, some more setting description of the boat might have added to the excitement of the last part of the chapter. It seemed a bit rushed to me ...

Happy writing!
Cheers :D

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm really glad you like the beginning. He's a very mysterious character; even when you know more than the other characters, you won't know everything. That's what I love about mysteries. :)

Thank you so much for leaving a review and for the critique, I'll be reading over my story again. :D

Sam.


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