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Review:wytchkitty13 says:
Hi it's wytchkitty13 here from the holiday review swap! :)

Wow! What a breath-taking, descriptive chapter! It's like you are right there, experiencing it all with the Bloody Barron.
To be honest, I have never read a story with the Bloody Barron as a main character before and so it's new and refreshing to see.

You can get a since of loss, and eternal suffering in this chapter. It almost brought tears to my eyes because he is haunted with this forever. Since he is a ghost he can not rest, which would explain why some ghosts stay around because if there is no way to take care of their 'unfinished business' they are trapped.
The way you described this, I can sit back, close my eyes and see it. The room so cold and bare and the mirror is the only companion he has.
He doesn't truly have any duties there, so I'm sure this mirror takes up most of his time. All the things he could have had, could have done. He constantly dwells on...
I can see why Dumbledore said that men wasted away in front of it. That mirror while shows something that for a fleeting moment can make one feel a sense of happiness, it's almost like draining a life force- especially for the living. (sorry random thought there lol)

Great job on this first chapter! It really brings in a reader with its amazing description and feel. I reread it to make sure I didn't miss anything- which I did so I read it again lol. Thanks for sharing it with us :)

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the swap :)

I'm happy to hear that you felt like this was an original idea, in terms of the Bloody Baron being front and center, and that the emotion came through. I just imagined that his life must be so sad, because he's right there in the castle with Helena and yet they've been driven apart by an act that he regrets. I wouldn't be surprised if Dumbledore was thinking of the Baron and men like him when he described people as wasting away before it. I think your thoughts here are spot-on! :)

Thanks so much for the lovely review. I hope to see you back later to read more of the story!

Amanda


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