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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi academica! I'm here for the holiday review swap! I've always wanted to read this story but haven't ever found the time so! Also, I love Gregory Alan Isakov!! Such a wonderful artist.

Anyway, you've done such a great job with introducing this story. The Barons guilt is so rich and distinctive which is really great for such a short chapter. I already feel sympathy for him and i'm insanely curious to know how the rest of the story is going to play out.

What I especially liked was his obsession with the Mirror. It must be ten times harder to deal with it because he can't waste away in front of it but it was interesting because it was that action that seemed to bring humanity to him. He did it to be like the men who wasted away before him. It would make sense though that he would do that, to torture himself again and again of a life he never lived.

Your descriptions here are beautiful too, all the jewels and the lace. Some facts you put in too where really cleverly done, like the emerald S and her blue tiara. It was a subtle way of pointing out who these characters where and what house they belonged to without telling us upfront about it.

I also liked the subtle signs of her uncertainty over him in how he remembers her being so indecisive over her dress and how he hadn't seen that blissful smile of hers. It really adds a lot of richness and depth to your story that's absolutely phenomenal. I love when writers can put a lot of information into few words and not spell everything out for the reader. I feel like you've done that with this beginning chapter especially.

Great job!! I'm really pleased i was able to read this story!! Happy Christmas!

Author's Response: Hello, and thank you for swapping with me :)

I'm so happy to hear that the Baron's emotions seemed realistic. It was intimidating to try to get into his character, but I've really enjoyed writing him, and this vulnerable moment is no exception. I agree that it would be difficult to face the mirror as a ghost because there really is no escape from the pain. Instead, he has to relive it over and over.

It's great that you liked the imagery, because I know I put a lot into this little prologue and I was afraid it was too burdened. I did try to use it to insert subtle hints about the characters' histories and to set the stage.

I definitely didn't want to just come out and say that the wedding didn't work out and so they didn't have a happily ever after and the end :D Instead, I tried to focus on those little moments of indecision that can so easily add up. I'm glad that it worked well for you.

Thanks so much for this lovely review, and I hope that you return to read more soon!

Amanda


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