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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! It's me, back with your second review!

And wow!!! If it's even possible, I loved this chapter even more than the last one. Your descriptive skills are so powerful, and your words just fit together so perfectly. It's as if you have this picture in your head, because maybe you've BEEN there, and you convey what you've seen in the most vivid detail.

Greyback is so bloody and violent... The way he changed from placidity to ferocity was really horrifying, but in a nice way, of course! The descriptions were so real that it felt like I was there!

Also, I like the idea of a Memory Chamber. That's something I've never seen before, but I'll bet that you come up with all sort of things about the Potter eras that no one has ever thought of.

For instance, Lavender and Seamus. I haven never seen them together in fanfiction, at least, not that I can recall. If I did, I soon forgot it because it was probably super-goofy. This ship in this story was not goofy at all. You kept me guessing at who the girl was until I actually read the tombstone inscription... I suppose I should've recalled that Lavender was attacked by Greyback, but it was even more fun to be surprised by the ending.

I loved how Seamus' issues are like a story within a story. It seems like his pain and sadness over losing Lavender is just laced with intriguing events, and I'd like to know how/if/when they started loving each other, if Lavender ever returned his affection. I WOULD say that a one-shot about Seamus would be the coolest thing ever, but I won't. Because you know what? I think you put just the right amount of explanation/description into Seamus' troubles. It's often best to leave the reader with questions, which is what you've done to me. It's kind of an awkward place--one that feels satisfied because the conflict is resolved, but at the same time, a bit unsatisfied, because there are things left unsaid.

It is often those unsaid things that give a story its deepest meaning, and that's the gift you have: You are sensitive to the ebb and flow of a story, and you can engineer your words to make seamless connections to the meaning of it. You weave webs that ensnare readers, and not many people can do that.

One last compliment, and then I'll get out of your hair.
The chapter titles of this story are not just an arbitrary name. They really contrIbute to the meaning of the story. First Greyback was incognito, seemingly innocent, disguised as a regular person. Then he took on his true wolf skin, and the whole story flipped over. Very clever, CambAngst. Very clever indeed.

Anyways, the story was amazing and you're amazing. I still don't know how you write as well as you do. It's a talent that I would definitely love to possess. :)

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi, there!

Wow, I am **so pleased** with your reaction to this. Ooh, I just want to squeeze you! OK, that wasn't really appropriate, so I'm going to restrict myself to non-physical reactions. ;)

Hermione wagered -- correctly -- that if she could put Greyback in the right environment, his true nature would emerge. And magic being what it is, she's able to do exactly that. The Memory Chamber was an idea that came to me as I was outlining this story, and I really loved it. Not least because it saved me the trouble of trying to describe a couple dozen members of the Wizengamot all lining up to jump into the same penseive.

Lavender and Seamus being in a relationship was a bit of head canon that I picked up from a few fics that I really enjoyed. I think of them as having become very close during the year that Snape and the Carrows ran Hogwarts. They were both leaders in Dumbledore's Army and since Seamus no longer had Dean, Ron or Harry to turn to for support, she definitely became very important to him. It probably would make a nice one-shot, but I'd have to work up the inspiration.

Wow. I've been fortunate enough to have people say some very nice things about my stories, but you're the first who's said that I have a sixth sense for ebb and flow. I kind of like that. I'm putting it on my resume. ;)

So you're probably going to think this is funny, but chapter titles are the bane of my existence! I struggled so long to come up with the two for this story. And my really long stories? Gah, I was so out of ideas by the end!

Thank you so much for all of the kind words. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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